You have the foundations for a really great channel here; love your personality, you have a solid knowledge of a topic that not everyone has and people will want and the in-car setting obviously works well in your favor. Also, your editing is absolutely decent. Editing isn't something that really stands out to a viewer... nobody is going to look at your editing and go 'Wow, that was some amazing editing... I should subscribe to this channel.' But poor editing will definitely have the opposite reaction. Your editing is not going to drive people away (pardon the pun).
You spent the majority of the video discussing your topic points and giving us an entertaining story... and then you ended it with a montage. That was effective, but I wonder if the viewer is going to want to consume a video in this way. That is to say, I would watch your retention graph carefully here. I have a suspicion that the viewer is going to hang out for the comedy/insight, and then the montage is going to signal them that the meat of the video is over and they are quickly going to click away. IMO the montage would have been better served edited into and through your monologue. It would have cut this video down to 4-5 minutes... but man that would have been a jam-packed and entertaining 4-5 minutes. Which is kinda what you are looking to accomplish. For reference; the top 10% of 7 minute videos on YouTube average about 75% retention.
Personally I would not advise driving while filming. All obvious reasons aside you are more focused on your video, the monologue and your audience when you are not having to pay attention to the road. There is less background audio noise too... and that is a highly underrated issue. In fact I would say that your video quality is totally acceptable and that if you were to improve anything it would be to get yourself a solid microphone; audio would improve your quality more than video would.
We have a rule here about providing a review before you get one... I see you are struggling but the premise is simple; go to someone else in this thread who is asking for a review and provide one for them. Give them some feedback. Afterwards simply copy and paste the URL to that review in the Link to other Review Post: for your own. That way we make sure that everyone is contributing. You are welcome to do so now, I'll leave this up for you.
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